This was a hard chapter to figure out. After the last few “action chapters”, I knew I needed to do some plot mechanics, especially as far as providing glimpses of “how” we’re going to deal with the newly emergent dragon. While that definitely needed done, I didn’t want to loose the strong momentum I’d built up. What to do…what to do…? After some heavy deliberation while trying to figure out the “how” factor, it occurred to me that the only person in the story with any real clue of how to deal with a world rending dragon was one of my supporting characters. Then from there, it was just a matter of making it interesting and that reminded me that I had some lose threads that needed tying up. All in all, it was a definite detour from where I’d thought I’d go, but it turned out to be a very pleasant one, even if, admittedly, I not all that keen on writing the mushy stuff. Still, the goal was to set the stage for the main characters–or most of them at least, to come to realize that no human was going to get them out of the mess they were in, and hopefully I made some good movement in that direction; even if it was done indirectly. At least I hope I did, let’s take a look.
EHLSEWHERE Chapter Thirty Four
I hate to admit it–I mean it was sooooo lovey-dovey, romantic, including kissing?–but I really liked it. I’m very happy for the new couple, and I think the current heaviness of the story needed something lighthearted to balance things out. The bonus was that while there was a shift, I didn’t feel any real let down from the intensity of the last few chapters. That doesn’t mean there weren’t some things that probablyneed to be looked at though. First, since Behlize is supposed to be so wise, spiritually, why didn’t I take the opportunity to work that into her conversation with Prince Juhstice, or into the follow-on dialog between Juhstice and Dharis? Also, along similar lines, one or both of the princes could have started ‘voicing’ their concerns that what they were facing seemed to be too great of a task for anyone to deal with–any man that is. So, I’ll take a look at those areas on the second draft for sure. Even so, over all, I felt the writing was lively and flowed well, and yes, I guess a little romance sprinkled here and there is a good thing too.
Love conquers all, may His light and love shine upon you,
Mike
Leave a Reply