I was so excited to write this chapter. It’s an action chapter, one that had great promise of being very exciting and tense. The goal was to lay a solid foundation for Princess Chahrity to have some chinks knocked into her armor that would also, eventually, lead her down a path of massive character growth. I felt that Chahrity’s previous relationship with the criminal element, The Hand, was a perfect vehicle to do that, especially since I already had the annoying and very ambitious thief, Fingers available to work with. While I was at it, I also needed to keep working on one of the more important story arcs; that being the launching of the Grand Festival. There’s really not much else to discuss here…it’s really just a matter of seeing how well I did when it came to writing it.
EHLSEWHERE Chapter Forty Three
Well, that was a pleasant surprise–right up to the point were I changed the point of view and things went in the sewer. Which is ironic considering that the best part of this chapter took place inside a sewer. I’m not sure why, but I’ve found that a ‘captivating’ scene is easier to write. What do I mean by that? Aren’t captivating scenes made that way by writing them well? Maybe, but what I’m getting at here is that some scenes just have a built in wow factor from the moment you dream them up, to the point that if you can string the words together in a coherent manner then by its very nature its going to be captivating. That’s what I had with Fingers finding out he’d accidently captured Princess Chahrity. While you’re not going to feel sympathetic for Fingers as becomes aware of the impossible situation he gotten himself into, you can certainly understand his actions as he literally stabs his fellow thief in the back. I think that scene is gripping and needs very little polishing. So, Finger’s bad day made my day. Then I started reading about the parade and all my joy was wiped away. I’m sorry you had to read that. I’m not even sure how to critique it. There was so much wrong; poor, clunky setup of what was happening with the parade, bad prose, lack of emotion despite a little girl being injured or killed. Yuk. Here’s what I do know. It needs rewritten and I’m not even sure what point of view I’ll use when I do. Because this is an important scene that I need to move the main plot along I will keep the riot aspect, and I’ll likely still have the catalyst be the innocent little girl trying to run up to see the queen. Everything else just needs to become a bad memory. But on the bright side…Chahrity is still tied up in a sewer with a desperate killer. If that doesn’t hold the promise of some captivating writing opportunities ahead, what does?
Blessing to you and those you love,
Mike
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